Hi {{firstName}},
I'm on your newsletter (signed up in March). Tuesday's edition had a great subject — "Three returns we wish we hadn't taken" — but the body went straight into product before paying off the hook.
Newsletters at your scale that pay off the hook in the first 30 words tend to outperform straight product sends 2-3x on CTR.
If you'd like, I'll take one of your past sends and rewrite it as a side-by-side. No charge, no commitment. Which Tuesday do you want me to use?
— {{senderFirstName}}Being a real subscriber is the moat. Quoting the actual subject line from the recipient's send is unfakeable evidence of work. The free rewrite of a past send is low-effort for them to accept and creates a portfolio piece for you. 'Which Tuesday do you want me to use?' assumes the close.
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